Steello a.k.a. Marowak
Rhymes: 4/10
Plot: 4/10
Overall impression: 4/10
"I hope it will take away my mind and allow me tell you true about that’s the Way
what lies under me."
That was enough! First learn to spek English, then read and write English, and only then rhyme English. Plot is better but not much. And, guess what, I'm not impressed with your text at all.